5 Tips to improve your screenplay
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I would like to share my findings through judging a recent short film screenplay competition. LINK.

Here are 5 mistakes writer make and 5 tips on how to improve your screenplay.

5 Mistakes

5 Tips

To improve your screenplay.

MISTAKES #1

OVER EXPLANATORY

If you need to explain, it doesn’t work.

TIPS #1

LESS IS MORE: SHOW, DON’T TELL.

As cliche as it sounds, most writer tend to write too much information and details which leave little room for reader to depict what the scene is about. Don’t include emotions in the writing. Write what you see and what you hear. The actions and dialogs should be sufficient enough for the reader to “see” what the character is feeling. Start by simplifying and reduce unnecessary details.

MISTAKES #2

LACK OF ENGAGEMENT WITH THE AUDIENCE

Is it a page turner? Does it engages the reader wanting to find out more?
Why can’t the audience feel for the protagonist?

TIPS #2

RAISE THE STAKE & MYSTERY

There is nothing wrong about having a simple problem but the stake needs to be raise as we journey with the protagonist.
If the problem can be easily solve by the protagonist (main character), audience will expect little conflict and hence feel the lack of engagement and emotions.
There is just nothing to look forward to anymore.
Identify the protagonist goal early and make it clear to the audience.
Then keep raising the obstacles for the main character to overcome before he/she achieve the goal.

MISTAKES #3

CREDIBILITY

Most of the time, writers are in denial, assuming what they have written make sense.
Does the reader buy the world that the writer have created with the characters and the events?
Does it justify for every actions or dialogs from the character stand point?

TIPS #3

AUDIENCE TEST & RESEARCH

Show your script to someone who doesn’t know about your story.

  • Don’t say anything, just ask them to read it.
  • After they have read it, ask them, what do they understand about the story? What do they feel about it?
  • Credibility doesn’t always have to be factual.
  • It is crucial to develop all characters and dive deep into the characteristic, behaviours, backgrounds and psychological.
  • Sometimes stereotype works, however, authentic and insightful details will make your screenplay stand out.
  • What makes a murderer? What is the basic routine like for a fishmonger? How does a drug dealer talk and behave? Don’t assume, research.

MISTAKES #4

TOO ORDINARY

Why would I as a reader need to be reminded of another ordinary life through the characters? What is fresh and new about it?

TIPS #4

IRONY

Try to identify what make us human and inhuman. Connect audience with the story and characters that are relatable on a daily basis, then make the scene ironic. Let the reader cringe and feel an urge to relive life again.
Examples: https://literarydevices.net/irony/

MISTAKES #5

COMPLICATED PLOTS & TOO MANY CHARACTERS

Conflict is good, but too much complication may cause confusion.
As a result, the reader/audience might lose interest.
Not all films need to have a smart unexpected twist. Most of the “smart” twist seems too intentional at times.

You are opening a can of worms for each new character that you introduce that have an influence on the protagonist or the plot.
Every character needs to be accounted for.
Don’t introduce and then make them disappear.

TIPS #5

THEMES

A topic can help writer to focus. It is there but it’s not there.
The theme shouldn’t be shouting in the audience’s face.
Let the audience join the dots and realise it for themselves.
A reader needs to be able to smell what you are cooking.
When the dish (theme) is finally presented on the table, one starts to reflect back on those smell. 

The Screenplay Challenge

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